Sunday, December 2, 2007

It's All In Your Head

“Greg? Greg… can…hear… me?”

Greg tapped his forehead twice in a vain attempt to strengthen the signal. “Yeah babe. But you’re breaking up.”

“G… Greg!”

“I’m gonna hang up Claire. I might get better reception when I’m back at home, sweetie.” Frustrated, Greg kept hitting his head. He didn’t really think it would work, but he was watching a program on his computer the other night, and the main character kept trying to get a better signal by constantly hitting himself in the head. It might have been for comedic purposes, or maybe a vague reference to the way that back in the early twenty-first century, people took to beating their technology in hopes of making it work. But it wasn’t the early twenty-first century at all...


I wrote this piece a few years back to enter into a contest for Motorolla or some other mobile company like that. Their new market strategy involved some buzzword along the lines of "integrated technology in the future", so they wanted creative works in all genres to represent the concept.

I just entered for the hell of it, I knew this wouldn't be what they were looking for. I'm not even sure I think that it's that great myself - I too the concept and ran with it, and this is what I came up with. Still though, there are more than a few parts of this story I kinda dig, so check it out.

It may not have won anything in the land of cell phones, but at least someone will get to read it this way.



Enjoy!
- Shawn

3 comments:

Serena said...

Strange...but pretty much lacking in typos. You should proofread more often. =)

Unknown said...

This story is quite frankly too short, thus making the transitions between the different frames of mind way too hard to read. The other two stories were better.

Shawn said...

well, the short length was due to a length restriction at Motorolla, but I think you're right. This is something that needs to be lengthened out a bit. The more I think about it, I should probably alter the end a bit because it lacks the punch and clarity I'm hoping for.

Thanks for the feedback man, I really appreciate it.